Last year , I went with my family to Thailand . It was big country and had many natural place . Also you could fined all things you want to . In addition they had a good health service and all people knew about it . So this country had many foreigners from many country . when I was in Thailand I saw many companys in it for shoes and for jewelry , and I saw how they can made it . Moreover we went to many famous place in Thailand and had fun . But the important things for lady is sopping and sopping and sopping . Without this kind of things woman couldn't live . However the trip was very amazing and interesting because we learned a lot about their country and tradition . Also we faced them and met this kind people . And we're more interesting to going to Thailand again and meet our friend and had more fun in it .
Well tried Rahma.
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